After my final seminar, my external panel member Professor Amy Mullens who read my 91,000-word thesis and listened to my presentation, sent a 3-page long feedback on how I can improve my thesis before lodging for examination. The first paragraph of her feedback read:![]()
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๐๐ฃ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ โ๐๐โ ๐๐ข๐๐๐๐ก๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐ โ๐๐๐ข๐๐ฃ๐๐๐๐๐ก ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐กโ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐กโ ๐ก๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐๐ก๐ข๐ก๐ ๐ ๐โ๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐โ. ๐โ๐ ๐กโ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ก๐๐ข๐๐ก๐ข๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐ค๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐ก๐ก๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ก๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐: ๐ค๐๐๐ ๐โ๐๐๐๐, ๐๐ข๐๐๐ก๐ข๐๐ก๐๐๐, ๐ก๐ฆ๐๐๐ ๐๐ก๐; ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ โ๐๐๐ก ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โ๐ ๐๐ ๐ก๐๐ฅ๐ก (๐๐๐ ๐ ๐กโ๐๐ 3 ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โ๐ ) ๐๐ฅ๐๐๐๐ก ๐คโ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ก ๐๐ โ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐ข๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐ก๐๐๐. ๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐ก๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ (๐.๐. ๐๐๐๐๐, ๐๐ก๐๐) ๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ข๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ . ๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ฃ๐๐๐ค ๐๐๐โ๐๐๐ ๐ค๐๐กโ ๐๐๐๐ก๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ ๐๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐. (๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ก๐ ๐๐ โ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐ฃ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ฃ๐๐๐๐ ๐ก๐ ๐ฆ๐๐ข๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐ ๐ข๐๐๐๐ฃ๐๐ ๐๐). ๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ข๐๐๐๐๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐กโ๐๐๐ข๐โ๐๐ข๐ก ๐กโ๐ ๐๐๐ข๐๐ ๐ ๐๐ ๐ฆ๐๐ข๐ ๐โ๐ท ๐ก๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โ๐ค๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐; ๐ผ๐กโ๐ ๐๐๐๐๐ก ๐กโ๐๐ก ๐ฆ๐๐ข๐ ๐ ๐ฆ๐ ๐ก ๐๐๐ฃ๐๐๐ค ๐โ๐๐๐ก๐๐ โ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ข๐๐๐๐ โ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ฆ๐๐ข๐ ๐โ๐ท.
๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ ๐๐โ๐๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐ก๐๐ ๐ข๐ ๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐ฅ๐๐ ๐๐๐กโ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐โ ๐ค๐๐กโ ๐ฃ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐ ๐ ๐๐ข๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ฆ๐๐กโ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ก๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ก ๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐๐กโ ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐โ๐๐๐ ๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ก๐ ๐ก๐ ๐โ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐๐๐ ๐ก/๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐โ ๐๐ข๐๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐ โ๐คโ๐๐โ ๐ค๐๐ ๐๐ข๐โ ๐๐๐๐ ๐ ๐ก๐๐๐๐๐๐ฆ ๐๐๐๐ฃ๐๐ฆ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ฆ๐๐ข๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ก๐๐ก๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ ๐&๐ด ๐กโ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐กโ๐ ๐กโ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ข๐๐๐๐ก.
She suggested many areas to improve my work but her opening paragraph as captured above has kept me excited about my research. Now let me return to working on improving my thesis and get it ready for exams.





